A blog created by the students and teacher at Mount Wachusett CC - Graphic and Interactive Design Department for the purposes of sharing and critiquing their artwork as a collaborative project.
Tuesday, October 25, 2016
I hated almost everything I made, a little less so on this. But after talking to Professor P. I think I have a better idea than this. so here's the first of my 3 images in the form of a magazine add.
It's bad.
I like the yellow section of your design, it is readable, incudes logo and easy to read. The yellow really catches the eye(s). But I am thrown off by your house pick, I would focus more on paths up close and have them look solar. Other than that great job
Jonathan – It appears that you have found a great “every-man” house to use, which makes sense according to your mission statement. One of the things we talked about is that Solar Paths (notice the spelling… are you intentionally misspelling the word Solar for your product name?) product could allow a homeowner to be electric-grid free. Right? So… taking that idea to its far out, but logical conclusion, would mean that this house could be situated in isolated areas that were not dependent on the grid.
I see that you have silhouetted the top portion of the house and added a blue sky with sun. OK – but why stop there? Why not place this house perched on the top of a mountain, or sitting on an island? Where are these paths? Are they glowing to show us they produce electricity? Where are the lights that are possible as a result of using this product? Should you be using a house in a scene that is actually at a later time of day, or even at night, that is glowing with the lights on?
Think BIG. Currently this appears to be an image that “TELLS” us about what the product is and can do with lots of type in the yellow area. The challenge for you is to “SHOW” us the benefits of your product with little to no type.
No other type, only the headline should be used: Designing the Future… for You.
I look forward to seeing the next re-imaged image that will show us the product and what is offers.
This image is probably a great base to use for your advertisement but the yellow informational bar makes it seem much less like an advertisement and alot more like an article. All of the text turns off a reader especially nowadays if you don't know lead them through. I'm just curious if you're going to illustrate the paths or take a more abstract route.
It’s a good start with the house there, it would be interesting to see a painting on of like a solar panel pathway or wall. This would be a good house to use as you can paint on roof or wall or path way. The color theme here would work well it seems, it just screams green energy.
I like the yellow section of your design, it is readable, incudes logo and easy to read. The yellow really catches the eye(s). But I am thrown off by your house pick, I would focus more on paths up close and have them look solar. Other than that great job
ReplyDeleteJonathan – It appears that you have found a great “every-man” house to use, which makes sense according to your mission statement. One of the things we talked about is that Solar Paths (notice the spelling… are you intentionally misspelling the word Solar for your product name?) product could allow a homeowner to be electric-grid free. Right? So… taking that idea to its far out, but logical conclusion, would mean that this house could be situated in isolated areas that were not dependent on the grid.
ReplyDeleteI see that you have silhouetted the top portion of the house and added a blue sky with sun. OK – but why stop there? Why not place this house perched on the top of a mountain, or sitting on an island? Where are these paths? Are they glowing to show us they produce electricity? Where are the lights that are possible as a result of using this product? Should you be using a house in a scene that is actually at a later time of day, or even at night, that is glowing with the lights on?
Think BIG. Currently this appears to be an image that “TELLS” us about what the product is and can do with lots of type in the yellow area. The challenge for you is to “SHOW” us the benefits of your product with little to no type.
No other type, only the headline should be used: Designing the Future… for You.
I look forward to seeing the next re-imaged image that will show us the product and what is offers.
This image is probably a great base to use for your advertisement but the yellow informational bar makes it seem much less like an advertisement and alot more like an article. All of the text turns off a reader especially nowadays if you don't know lead them through. I'm just curious if you're going to illustrate the paths or take a more abstract route.
ReplyDeleteIt’s a good start with the house there, it would be interesting to see a painting on of like a solar panel pathway or wall. This would be a good house to use as you can paint on roof or wall or path way. The color theme here would work well it seems, it just screams green energy.
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