A blog created by the students and teacher at Mount Wachusett CC - Graphic and Interactive Design Department for the purposes of sharing and critiquing their artwork as a collaborative project.
Great color choice for the dreaming chick, and landscape. Design change is easy to read, same with slogan and " you never have to leave your dreams. now you can relive them" Only this that gets me is the choice of font for "you never have to leave your dreams. now you can relive them." I would suggest more of a dream font other than that great work.
Mason – the color palette is really great, and lets us know that we are in an alternate reality. Colors usually appear highly saturated in dreamland, so this makes a lot of sense.
Question – is she sleeping or falling? If she is meant to fall (like a play on the words “falling asleep”) then maybe that needs to be more clear. Currently she appears to be flying… sort of. Her position isn’t really a flying position (and I don’t necessarily mean a superman type of position)… so there is some confusion about what that women is engaged doing. On the other hand, if she weren’t the only strange thing in the composition, maybe that would be just fine.
I encourage you to continue to add more dream-like weird items to the composition… so, just like seeing a women in the air next to a person-sized pink tree, we begin to question the juxtaposition of all the elements in the image. This approach will catch our attention, that’s for sure.
The headline in the ad should be “Designing the Future… for You.” But I’ll let you decide whether it should be a tagline to your current headline, or not. Either way, I wonder if the headline I see here should simply be rewritten “Relive your Dreams.” After all, we all know we HAVE to leave our dreams and live our lives… you are not offering a replacement for that, but a way to simply remember them. Right?
Dreamy, color works I think it’s a dream, I think you should keep the words you have. Simplifying it may not be a bad idea also. I do get the confusion about sleeping/flying point, may be turning her or just adjusting the pose would work. Other than that I think it’s an awesome concept.
The color works really well with the theme, and that tagline for your product sets the whole image. If I had to offer something (And I've been told I do) then maybe do something with the sky, just to see what it would look like.
Great color choice for the dreaming chick, and landscape. Design change is easy to read, same with slogan and " you never have to leave your dreams. now you can relive them" Only this that gets me is the choice of font for "you never have to leave your dreams. now you can relive them." I would suggest more of a dream font other than that great work.
ReplyDelete*edit type thing* I don't know what the slogan will be yet but that's how I would like it placed.
ReplyDeleteMason – the color palette is really great, and lets us know that we are in an alternate reality. Colors usually appear highly saturated in dreamland, so this makes a lot of sense.
ReplyDeleteQuestion – is she sleeping or falling? If she is meant to fall (like a play on the words “falling asleep”) then maybe that needs to be more clear. Currently she appears to be flying… sort of. Her position isn’t really a flying position (and I don’t necessarily mean a superman type of position)… so there is some confusion about what that women is engaged doing. On the other hand, if she weren’t the only strange thing in the composition, maybe that would be just fine.
I encourage you to continue to add more dream-like weird items to the composition… so, just like seeing a women in the air next to a person-sized pink tree, we begin to question the juxtaposition of all the elements in the image. This approach will catch our attention, that’s for sure.
The headline in the ad should be “Designing the Future… for You.” But I’ll let you decide whether it should be a tagline to your current headline, or not. Either way, I wonder if the headline I see here should simply be rewritten “Relive your Dreams.” After all, we all know we HAVE to leave our dreams and live our lives… you are not offering a replacement for that, but a way to simply remember them. Right?
Great beginning.
Dreamy, color works I think it’s a dream, I think you should keep the words you have. Simplifying it may not be a bad idea also. I do get the confusion about sleeping/flying point, may be turning her or just adjusting the pose would work. Other than that I think it’s an awesome concept.
ReplyDeleteThe color works really well with the theme, and that tagline for your product sets the whole image. If I had to offer something (And I've been told I do) then maybe do something with the sky, just to see what it would look like.
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