A blog created by the students and teacher at Mount Wachusett CC - Graphic and Interactive Design Department for the purposes of sharing and critiquing their artwork as a collaborative project.
Matt – Your change of background for #1 (hand dropping razor) makes lots of sense. The logo is a smaller, more appropriate size, and the bathroom environment helps us know it’s a personal grooming activity that we are talking about. I encourage you to increase the size of the basket and hand, and add a suggestion of many razors in that basket. Can we see the tip of a pile sitting inside the basket? This helps us know that whatever you are suggesting, it will replace not just one razor, but last much longer.
The cutting helmet sitting on the counter is ok, but I’m not convinced anyone will actually know that is the product. Which is, as I said, ok. Showing the product is not essential, and sometimes is preferable. The most visually successful concept that you have developed is all about the hand, the basket, and what it is throwing away.
I notice that the colorfully stroked paths in this one aren’t as obvious. Why not? This is the element that will make the design appear fun, full of energy, and aimed at a youthful audience. Go for it… and allow those lines to do for this what they are doing for #2 design.
#2 Design – the hand is touching a blank screen… what would be on this screen? It’s in the foreground so there ought to be something there to help us understand the digital user experience. Please reduce the logo to the same size as I see in #1.
#3 – this is the most problematic ad design. Rather than keep thinking about this, I suggest you leave it behind. This is an opportunity for you to create another hand/basket composition… strengthening and supporting the visual concept. You can use the same hand, but different razor, and in different environment.
Those are my thoughts. Looking forward to seeing all 3 ads move forward for the PDF presentation next Tuesday.
I think they all look great, the lines work well and bring the composition together. The thing i noticed is the size of the trimmer in the first image. it just needs to be a little bigger I think, just a proportion thing it stands out.
Great work, but I think you need to incorporate "BuzzfadR" into the other images
ReplyDeleteMatt – Your change of background for #1 (hand dropping razor) makes lots of sense. The logo is a smaller, more appropriate size, and the bathroom environment helps us know it’s a personal grooming activity that we are talking about. I encourage you to increase the size of the basket and hand, and add a suggestion of many razors in that basket. Can we see the tip of a pile sitting inside the basket? This helps us know that whatever you are suggesting, it will replace not just one razor, but last much longer.
ReplyDeleteThe cutting helmet sitting on the counter is ok, but I’m not convinced anyone will actually know that is the product. Which is, as I said, ok. Showing the product is not essential, and sometimes is preferable. The most visually successful concept that you have developed is all about the hand, the basket, and what it is throwing away.
I notice that the colorfully stroked paths in this one aren’t as obvious. Why not? This is the element that will make the design appear fun, full of energy, and aimed at a youthful audience. Go for it… and allow those lines to do for this what they are doing for #2 design.
#2 Design – the hand is touching a blank screen… what would be on this screen? It’s in the foreground so there ought to be something there to help us understand the digital user experience. Please reduce the logo to the same size as I see in #1.
#3 – this is the most problematic ad design. Rather than keep thinking about this, I suggest you leave it behind. This is an opportunity for you to create another hand/basket composition… strengthening and supporting the visual concept. You can use the same hand, but different razor, and in different environment.
Those are my thoughts. Looking forward to seeing all 3 ads move forward for the PDF presentation next Tuesday.
I think they all look great, the lines work well and bring the composition together. The thing i noticed is the size of the trimmer in the first image. it just needs to be a little bigger I think, just a proportion thing it stands out.
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